Bugs

[den]

I'm not sure this one works very well.

Comments

[hespa.livejournal.com]

My main problem with it was the background being so dark I couldn't figure out where the bottom of the first panel became the bottom of the third. I also thought for a little while that the first panel was split horizontally - I wouldn't have known it wasn't if not for other people's references to throwing, which I eventually realised referred to that panel.

But on the whole I'm enjoying "Bugs" immensely!

[copperwolf.livejournal.com]

This would be more clear of the pictures were strung out in a horizontal line, or if the grid lines dividing them were white instead of black.

It's much easier to understand what's happening in the re-drawn third panel than in the old version.

The whole story remains very cute. :)

[dewhitton.livejournal.com]

Good idea! White grid-lines it is